Manuscripts

mjp

Founding member
As a matter of fact, I did, in February. You'd think that would open up a lot of time to work on things like this, but looking for a job seems to take up more time than actually doing a job. Ha.

That being said, if anyone is looking for a Director of Communications...I know a guy.
 

PhillyDave

“The essential doesn't change.” Beckett
Not that you'd want to but I bet u would kick ass as an I.T. guy for the City of Philadelphia. I know a guy.
 

mjp

Founding member
If life ever takes me to live in Philadelphia I'll contact your guy. Or live in his basement, one of the two.
 

mjp

Founding member
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?WorkNumber=3358 (2 versions, only minor changes in "Sifting")
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?WorkNumber=2318
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?WorkNumber=5554 (NEW - different poem with same title in "Flash of Lightning")
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?WorkNumber=2331
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?WorkNumber=2332 (2 versions)
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?WorkNumber=2472
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?WorkNumber=5282
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?WorkNumber=2334 (2 versions)
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?WorkNumber=2342
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?WorkNumber=3382 (2 versions)
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?WorkNumber=2345
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?WorkNumber=2366 (2 versions - it was changed in War All the Time, but it's interesting to compare the kinds of changes done when Bukowski was alive to what was done after he died.)
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?WorkNumber=5350 (NEW - probably not surprising that it was never published, considering he calls Harold Norse (I think it's Norse, anyway) "a little bitch in a wig" and a "suckerfish, complaining untalented flea-bitch")
 
It's funny that A Member of the Tribe may well be about Norse, just as Dylan's Positively 4th Street may well be about critics. No matter how obvious it is or isn't, the message is what makes it.

That said, I'm going to gingerly open my Penguin Modern Poets #13 to see what Norse has going on (or not).
 

mjp

Founding member
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?WorkNumber=4583 ("farted" becomes "failed" in Storm for the Living)
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?WorkNumber=2371
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?WorkNumber=4584 (2 versions)
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?WorkNumber=3388
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?WorkNumber=4069 (ugh)
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?WorkNumber=4585 (ugh again)
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?WorkNumber=5555 (from here on out, let's just assume you could say 'ugh' to most of them)
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?WorkNumber=2417
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?WorkNumber=4532
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?WorkNumber=4840 (2 versions - same)
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?WorkNumber=3407 (twisting the cap off what?)
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?WorkNumber=4587 (ugh - sorry, I had to)
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?WorkNumber=2445 (2 versions - same)
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?WorkNumber=2456 ("I know him well, it's me" ?! die JM, die)
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?WorkNumber=3410 (3 versions - formatting change)
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?WorkNumber=2463
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?WorkNumber=2469
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?WorkNumber=4244 (2 versions)
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?WorkNumber=4610 (NEW)
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?WorkNumber=4738 (2 versions, changes to second version in War All The Time)
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?WorkNumber=4588
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?WorkNumber=2491 (a typical rape, but an interesting stanza left on the cutting room floor...)
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?WorkNumber=2520
 

PhillyDave

“The essential doesn't change.” Beckett
Endlessly fascinating. Gonna have to spend some time giving these a "close reading" when I'm not at work.
 

mjp

Founding member
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?WorkNumber=3662
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?WorkNumber=3747 (big chunks of this were cut in Bone Palace Ballet)
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?WorkNumber=5558 (feel like I've seen this in a book, but maybe not)
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?WorkNumber=5559 (2 versions, early version of "transformation and disfiguration at the p.o.")
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?WorkNumber=4155 (a "joke" becomes a "miracle," Martin inserts his idiotic parentheses yet again, and a reference to wine disappears like magic - just another day at the office)
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?WorkNumber=3795
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?WorkNumber=3798 (2 versions, identical)
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?WorkNumber=3805 (2 versions - not every poem about Jane was a love poem...)
 

Erik

If u don't know the poetry u don't know Bukowski
Founding member
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?WorkNumber=3818 - 4 different versions - only a few stanzas, but he gave it a lot of attention

Strange. Shouldn't it be "bang closed" and "ran" with past tense in both lines?

1542022746899.png
 

mjp

Founding member
"bang closed" can be read in present tense. That's how I read it anyway.

If you substitute "shut" for "closed" it makes more sense in present tense, but he kept "bang closed" through all 4 versions, so he must have liked the way it sounded.
 

PhillyDave

“The essential doesn't change.” Beckett
He really fucks the beauty of the spare & simple and turns it into wordy & simplistic/dopey. Ugh.
 

mjp

Founding member
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?w=3494&Title=the-smirking-dark
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?w=4739&Title=snake-eyes
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?w=2753&Title=solving-a-crime-before-it-begins
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?w=2770&Title=somebody-else - two versions, both the same
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?w=2781&Title=somethings-knocking-at-the-door - a good one, previously only available from the butcher shop
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?w=2812&Title=spelling-it-out-on-my-computer
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?w=417&Title=a-split - this could be an early draft, but it's still Martinized in The Night Torn Mad With Footsteps and The Pleasures of the Damned ("drunk" removed, etc., etc.)
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?w=4961&Title=straw-hat - two versions, both the same
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?w=2844&Title=stuck-with-it
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?w=426&Title=a-summation
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?w=3542&Title=the-swimming-pool
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?w=2891&Title=talking-to-a-part-of-my-mailbox - (earlier?) version differs from both Wormwood and War All the Time
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?w=2893&Title=talking-to-the-barkeep
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?w=2896&Title=tb - two versions, both the same
https://bukowski.net/database/detail.php?w=2888&Title=taken

The last one is another example of the editor not understanding what he is editing. In a poem about writers getting mixed up in politics, Bukowski is asking why - when you've been given the gift of the ability to write - you would lower yourself into the shithole of politics. He says:

fools run governments, not every-​
one can guide the​
word.​

which Martin changes to:

fools run governments, not every-​
one can guide the​
world.​

- - -

Then there's this:

asshole.png


Ooookay, tell us how you really feel, John...
 

mjp

Founding member
20 or 30 years ago, when someone wanted to knock down an old house in Los Angeles and build one of those pre-fab "mansions" in its place, it was common to knock down all of the old house except for a small piece of one wall, then build the new house around it. I suppose they did that for permitting reasons, a "remodel" being easier to get than a tear-down and new build.

I guess you're saying that's what we're looking at here. A Martin "remodel."
 
Top